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Monday, November 20, 2006

 

The Longest Night

Metal twisting-- glass breaking-- pin prick lights-- pain-- loud noises.

***

Michael awoke in a panic. “Honey,” His fiancée aroused from his start wakening, “Is everything alright?“ And he suddenly remembered where he was. The wedding was only three months away, and the stress had been giving him strange nightmares.

“Everything is fine,” he said and laid his head back on his pillow.

***

“Welcome to The Nook, how may help you today?” Michael hadn’t heard the customer come in, but the sound of Madeline’s voice brought him back to reality. He usually spent Saturday afternoons sitting in her used book shop, and today he had been reading The Illustrated Man.

“I’m just browsing, thank you,” the young woman answered. Michael returned to his book and tried to remember where he left off. He found his place and finished the page.

“Ray Bradbury is my favorite,” he looked up again to see the woman running her fingers across the spines of the old books.

“My fiancée said I should it read it,” he smiled as he turned the page.

“Your fiancée has good taste,” she took a Eudora Welty from the shelf and pulled up a chair next to Michael.

“Yes she does,” he looked up and briefly met Madeline’s eyes from across the room. They shared a short smile which was promptly interrupted by another customer. He watched her for another moment before escaping back into the pages.

***

The rushing of air-- a repetitious beeping-- inaudible murmur.

***

The nightmares were constant. He could not sit alone for even a short time before he dozed off and the hauntings flooded in.

He jerked up in his chair where a computer screen beckoned him to finish his report for the day, but he could not recall what he had been reporting. After a quick read through, he hurriedly finished careful not to doze off again. He had been out for a while and he was glad he had been working from his home.

Once his report had been completed, he rushed to the grocery store before it closed. He grabbed the essentials and knew he could come back later for everything else. On his way out of the store he heard a familiar voice, “It’s Michael, isn’t it?”

He turned to see the woman from the bookstore. “That’s correct, but I don’t recall yours. In fact, I don’t remember telling you mine,” Michael felt slightly uncomfortable at the intrusion.

Sensing the awkwardness, the woman said apologetically, “Madeline told me your name was Michael. A friend of mine told me about her store, so I went to check it out. After you left we had a nice chat and your name came up.” She shifted her plastic “Thank You” bag into her left hand and extended her right, “My name is Gwyneth.”

He took her hand and the uneasiness seemed to fade.

***

“Michael, I love you so much. Why can’t you just talk to me?”

***

“Did you have another bad dream?” Madeline held Michael’s sweaty arms as he came to.

“I wish you wouldn’t call them that. It makes me feel twelve,” he sat up and rubbed his eyes. “This one was different. I heard her voice. I saw her face.”

“Who’s face?” she asked as she switched her lamp on.

Michael was hesitant to answer, embarrassed that it wasn’t hers, “Gwyneth’s”.

“From the bookstore?” she said inquisitively. “You don’t even know her, do you?”

“Of course not. I talked to her once at the bookstore, and I ran into her again at the grocery store last week,” his voice seemed a little too defensive. He had never thought of Gwyneth outside of the two occasions, but he couldn’t help to be affected by his dream.

“We only have two months before our wedding,” Madeline was not confident in his answer. “It is too late for you to be having cold feet.”

“It was just a dream,” he reached over her and turned the lamp off and tried to fall back asleep. He kept telling himself it was only a dream, but he remained unconvinced.

***

Michael sat in a pew at the church he was to married in the next day. He knew this was the way his life was supposed to be, but he still wondered.

“Come here often?” as if a sign from God, Gwyneth appeared in the pew behind Michael. “How did the rehearsal go?”

“It went well,” he answered. He looked toward the alter at the end of the aisle, but he could only picture himself and Gwyneth together.

“You don’t sound convinced,” she kidded.

“Who are you?” Michael turned toward her. “Ever since I met you, my life has changed. I love Madeline, but I cannot marry her tomorrow.”

“Is that my fault?” she didn’t sound angry, but she was generally concerned.

“Of course it’s your fault!” his lash startled them both. “No, it is my own fault. I have been having my nightmares since before I met you.” He turned back into his seat and rubbed the back of his neck.

She moved to the seat next him and took him by the arms, “What nightmares?”

His face flushed from embarrassment, but he felt safe with her, “I have been having dreams for a little more than three months. In the dreams I see you, but you are in distress. You are in pain because I cannot be with you. Something is wrong with me, but for the life of me I cannot figure out why.”

“Nothing is wrong with you,” she took his face in her hands to look him in his eyes. “You are under a lot of stress. Anyone should understand what you are going through.”

“My reality is falling apart. Sometimes, the dreams feel more real than this life,” he took her hand and looked back into her eyes. “Except for when I am with you.”

The sound of a door closing came from behind the two, catching them both off guard. “Michael Honey, when are coming h-” Madeline’s voice trailed off as she saw two of them holding hands. At the sight, she turned and ran out the church’s back door.

“I have to go,” Michael said, jumping to his feet.

“No, you don’t,” Gwyneth held fast to his hand. “You have a choice.”

“Tomorrow, she will be my wife. I have to go to her,” he broke her grip and started for the door.

“You said yourself that you cannot marry her tomorrow,” he stopped at the door with his hand on the knob.

“I don’t even know you,” he turned the handle and started to open the door.

“You’re wrong, Michael,” a sharp pain struck him in the head, and he dropped to his knees. “You know me better than you think.”

***

“Please wake up, Michael.”

Metal twisting-- glass breaking-- pin prick lights-- pain-- loud noises.

“I love you so much, please just talk to me.”

The rushing of air-- a repetitious beeping-- inaudible murmur.

“I don’t know what I will do if you don’t make it back to me.”

***

The hospital room was a drab gray, and the only light came from a florescent ceiling light. A woman sat hovering above the motionless man on the bed. Her tears had drained her lashes of their mascara, and her stomach was empty from the hours of staying by her husband’s side. A knock at the door took her attention away from the bed as a doctor arrived for a checkup. She got to greet the doctor, but the bed ridden man reached out to touch her arm.

“Gwyneth,” the sound was nearly incomprehensible, but it not misunderstood.

“My God! Michael, you’re awake,” Gwyneth began to sob as she grabbed hold of Michael’s hand. The doctor quickly arrived at the bedside and began checking the vital signs, but Gwyneth ignored him as her husband slowly became himself again.

***

“She died only minutes before you woke up,” The drive home was quiet, but Gwyneth needed to let Michael know about his automobile accident. “She was home visiting family, and you picked her up from the airport. You two have always been close friends. I kinda liked her too.” Michael listened as his wife choked to get the words out, “The drunk driver blindsided your car. He died instantly. You and Madeline were in critical condition for days before you both fell into comas. You were under for nearly two days.”

Michael sat in quite thought during the ride home. He was grateful to be alive, but the thought of Madeline running out the church door would haunt him the rest of his days.

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its good but a little short.
and since we're engaged people are going to take it wrong ha
and some of the dialogue could use some "you're"'s instead of "you are"

love you!
Posted 11/20/2006 7:27 AM by umbrella__love - reply

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So, the whole thing with Madeline was a dream, and his "nightmares" before he woke up were reality?

Man. 

Pretty good though.  I'd agree with Renee, though.  More casual dialogue. 

Posted 11/20/2006 9:52 AM by kroe761 - reply

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I really liked it. There were a couple typos, but other than that I thought it was great.
Posted 11/20/2006 11:20 AM by tombstone_blues - reply

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“The Longest Night”
Twisting metal—glass breaking—bright lights—pain.
***
The nightmare jolted Michael from his sleep. He hadn’t had a dream like that since was a kid. “Honey,” his fiancée was stirred by his startled wakening, “Is everything ok?”
“I’m fine, Madeline,” he wiped the sweat from his brow and tried to resettle into his mussed sheets. It took several minutes for his heart to stop pounding and lying in bed awake made him restless. The sun was peeking through the blinds, so he decided to get an early start on his work.
He quietly walked from the bedroom to the study. “Let’s see what Hollywood has for me today,” he said out loud as he booted up his computer. Paramount had hired him earlier in the year to be a screenplay editor and they never ran out of work for him to do. His inbox had forty-seven new messages, forty-one of which were from paramount. “It looks like a slow business day,” he said.
***
“What do you think of these?” Madeline asked Michael pointing to an antique style lamp and end table set. “Do you think they will match the sofa?” The two were shopping for groceries, but she always seemed to pull him away from their original objective.
“We already have an end table,” he said.
“We don’t have an end table, you have an end table.” She had become worse since the engagement, and he had already sacrificed much of his possessions to her sharing plan.
“My end table was a gift from my mother when I told her of our engagement, so technically, it belongs to us.” He wasn’t about to lose his end table. Defeated, Madeline moved on, but she remained silent through the better part of their errand.
“Isn’t it exciting,” Michael said, trying to fill the air with conversation. “In three months, you are going to be my family.”
She turned to him and smiled. “I love you, Michael. You always know just what to say.” She continued talking about the wedding as they finished their routine, and Michael smiled at the thought of being with her for all of his years to come.
***
Metal scrapes across the asphalt—tiny fragments of glass bounce off of the road—two lights pierce through the night’s sky—the body goes numb from intense pain.
***
The nightmares were starting concern Michael. His first and only automobile accident was on his sixteenth birthday. It had only been a minor collision, but his license had been suspended because of it. It was nothing like his dream.
He had had the same dream every night for just over a week now. The same mutilated car, the same burning pain. This time, though, he was left with a new image: a face. A face he had never seen before. The image began to escape his grasp the moment he awoke, and soon after, it was gone.
***
Michael had the next day off, so he went to his favorite bookstore. The Nook was located a few blocks away from his apartment, and the walk was refreshing. “Good morning, Madeline,” he said.
She looked up from her book from behind the clerk’s desk and said, “I’ve got a good one for you today.” She held out an old book and he took it.
“Ray Bradbury, huh.” He flipped through the yellowed pages and found his usual spot.
“It’s one of my favorites,” Madeline called from behind the counter. The bell above the door jingled to announce a new customer. Michael glanced to see who it was, but he did not recognize the back of her head. He returned to his book and read another page.
“The Illustrated Man, good choice,” the woman said from down the aisle.
“Thanks, my fiancée picked it out.” He looked up from his book and saw the woman’s face. She was familiar in a way he didn’t understand.
“You’re fiancée has good taste.” She took Fahrenheit 451 from the shelf and pulled up a chair next to where Michael was sitting. “Now you’ve got me in a mood.”
“I don’t think I’ve seen you around here before,” Michael said.
“I’m new to town, actually,” she said. “I saw this store on my way downtown the other day, and I just had to see the inside.”
“Madeline does a great job keeping the store in tact.” Michael marked his page and set the book down. “But I have to come by every once in a while to make sure all the candles are blown out.” He looked over toward the reading clerk and smiled to himself.
“From that look on your face,” the woman said. “I’m guessing that Madeline is your fiancée.”
“Only for two and a half more months.” He continued to smile at the thought. “My name is Michael by the way. Michael Amherst.”
He held out his hand and she took it, “Gwyneth Lawson.”
Posted 12/5/2006 11:03 PM by ChiRocker - reply

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Several days went by since Michael met Gwyneth, but their passing had not been forgotten.
Posted 12/5/2006 11:33 PM by ChiRocker - reply


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